The Bolt and the Beautiful
I like the idea of this photograph, but I'm not satisfied with the execution. I've had this sitting on my hard drive for a couple of months. I wasn't going to share it, but your constructive criticism has been so helpful of late that I thought you could help me with it.
I looked at several different cropping options, but never found one that had the correct impact. If I were to take the picture again, I would try a couple different compositions, including one in which the bolt is centered, though I'm not sure that would work either. Another composition that could be stronger is a wider angle, setting the bolt even further to the left. What are your thoughts?
This photo was taken in Coal Harbor, North Vancouver. I was there admiring yet another location where mountains meet the sea. While looking up at the majestic scenery, I remembered to look down as well. I'm trying to learn to find the little things around me that we rarely take the time to examine.
Canon PowerShot S2 IS, 44mm, f/7.1, 1/250 sec, ISO 50
posted by Bethany at 9:38 AM
16 Comments:
It is possible to get a relatively good crop of this, I think. The one Ive come up with is a tight portrati mostly of the rail (sleeper). The main problem with this (for me) is the boat. It isnt helping the composiotn - its jsut a formles white mass. If you like Ill send what I came up with and you can let me know what you think. Easiest option - reshoot, and miss out the boat.
LOL Nice title :D (Learn something Jide!)
I actually have no problems with this one, the blurred out has an abstract feel to it which i like, a very nice way to frame in that bolt.No complaints here.
GREAT GREAT SHOT!!!
DOF is really nice and the focus is dead on. I like this one Tim.
At first look i noticed yellow over blue. then the bolt. You choose your composition to tell what you want to achieve with it. Here I smell the sea, there's a boat beside, and nice yellow barrier at the end. Reach and touch the bolt. This is a good shot. Cheers.
We all have shot like these, the ones that stay on our hard drives for months because we are not too sure :)
Howewver looking at this shot, I cannot help but really like it, I think you focused correctly on the right bolt and your DOF is perfect.
So for me, I would not change anything in the shot. Perfect as it is :)
Suby
I think this shot is too busy, too cluttered. What with the yellow thing, the white thing, the chopped off tree tops all competing in the background for my attention. My eye wants to follow the main wooden beam with the bolts but can't. What about cropping off the treeline and the white thing ?
reshoot with beam diagonal & less junk in photo
alas, the title is great. the shot is easy on the eyes as well.
Tim, I've seen your rant about people not giving honest critiques. For me, sometimes if I don't have anything nice or, more importantly, constructive to say, I just won't say anything at all.
For example, in this picture, I'm not quite sure what it is that you were trying to portray. For me, it's just a couple of bolts and doesn't hold any interest and I really don't know how to tell you to improve it because it has no interest for me, so I just remain silent.
I don't have a comment for every picture. After reading the words, I understand what you are trying to do, but it's not working for me.
How's that? :-)
Paul
Besides, I like to leave genuine, positive comments.
Oh, one more thing. If I do see a way that I think would improve the shot (quite subjective), I will surely mention it, otherwise, if I like/love it, I'll be sure to deliver a pat on the back!
great dof and perspective:-)) love the eyepopping yellow in the background:-)
lol, cool title! Nice dof!!
he front bolt alone would have been a good picture but I do like the blue/yellow out of focus in the background.
Good one on the title!
For me the shot works well: interesting.
I love photos of ordinary things.
I have two problems with the composition. The eye seeks light, so any time there is a white object, your attention will focus on it. So I agree with Pete about getting the boat out of the shot.
The second thing is, the straight-on lines of the board with the bolts on it. It's not very dynamic.
If possible, I would shoot this from an angle more to the right so that the angle of the board and the bolts would be more on a diagonal to the right, and cut out the white boat entirely. That would give you a diagonal from left to right which leads the eye further into the picture from the front bolt to the further bolt and then further to the right to the yellow boat. And possibly cropping off more of the trees is a good idea as well.
Actually, you could do pretty much all of that in Photoshop by using Free Transform then recropping.
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